Write about your experience consulting with someone about your writing.Include what that person told you about your writing. You can email me the name of the person who read your paper if you wish not to include that name here.
I decided to consult two different sources to help me revise my essay. First I contacted the writing center last week to get a little help from them. I had a little trouble as they were very busy and had to cancel my appointment last Thursday last minute. We rescheduled for this Monday and things went fairly smoothly. My instructor was pretty helpful although it was a little difficult to do over the phone. He helped me find various small mistakes that I had made in my writing and also suggested that I break up a few of my page long paragraphs into smaller paragraphs. A lot of mistakes that we found together were simple errors that I should have found myself if I had have proof read the essay. There was a little trouble with matching up pages over the phone. As I added and deleted phrases and sentences, the page numbers no longer matched up but that was only a minor problem. We talked a little bit about proper citation and when to use quotation marks and when not to but I am still not feeling totally comfortable with them. I am calling the center again tonight and hopefully someone there will help make things a little clearer. We talked on the phone for about fourty minuets and being that it was a long distance call it might hurt my phone bill but it was well worth it. All in all I was really grateful for the writing centers help, it really is an awesome service and its free! I should have consulted the writing center before now but next year I will definitely take advantage of the opportunity.
The other person I turned to for help is my mom. Although she didn’t study English in school she is a great writer and always helped me with my writing in high school. We don’t live together any more so I had to email her it and we talked through the paper over skype, which is much easier than over the phone. Using skype you can share your computer screen with the person you are talking to so she was able to walk me through all her editing. She found more mistakes with my paper than the writing center and it was a slightly longer process. Most of the problems she found in the paper were wording mistakes that might confuse the reader. We decided to add a little more background information in the introduction to help the reader keep pace. Many of my mistakes were made because I rushed through writing my essay and did not notice. I did not proof read the essay after I was finished and if I had I think I could have found many of the mistakes myself.
Having others proof read my work has been very helpful through my writing education. My mom has always been the one I turn to when I am stuck or need a little help. One great thing she has taught me to do is to say the point I am trying to make aloud to myself and then put it down on paper afterward. This helps to make your points clear to readers.
Sunday, April 24, 2011
Lesson 11 Prompt: Summarizing
On your blog, write about your experience summarizing the reading
Some of the articles that I have been using for my research paper have been tough to summarize while others have been easier. I am doing my research paper on the Alberta oil sands and the oil industry in that region. The majority of the articles I have found weigh the pros and cons of the issue and are fairly straight forward. These articles use facts and generally simplistic arguments to assert their claims. All of these articles are written for newspapers and are fairly easy to read so that the general public can make sense of them. These articles are fairly easy to summarize. That being said a minority of the articles use complex language and terms in them. These articles are for the most part written by industry insiders and there target audience is other people in the industry. When reading these articles I have consulted my dad to help me make better sense of them. He is in the oil business so he has been a great help making sense of these articles. The differing audience used by the writers of these articles has showed me how important it is to identify your audience before you begin writing. If you are writing a child’s book you cannot use complex wording and phrases that are way over a third graders head. While summarizing these articles has been fairly time consuming it has been very time saving in the long run. I have just finished writing out the rough draft of my research paper. As I planned out my essay I needed to use different references to strengthen my arguments. Having the summaries out in front of me allowed me to glance over them to decide which reference would be best in which part of my essay. It would have been much more difficult and ended up taking a lot more time if I had have just tried to remember the key points of each article in my head. The most useful article I found was the article “ Canada’s Tar Sands: Muck and Brass” from The Economist. It had a lot of strong arguments in favour of developing the oil sands and a lot of statistics that were very useful for my essay. It was one of the articles that was written for a wide audience and very easy to follow along with. In my Econ class we were required to subscribe to The Economist and we have to read a couple articles from it each week. It is a very well written magazine and I find it is usually written from an unbiased point of view. I searched for more articles from that magazine but could not find any more. It would have been nice to have another one to use but oh well. My mom is currently helping me proof read over the rough copy and I have an appointment with the writing center tomorrow. Hopefully there will not be to many problems with it and maybe I’ll be able to get it done this week!
Some of the articles that I have been using for my research paper have been tough to summarize while others have been easier. I am doing my research paper on the Alberta oil sands and the oil industry in that region. The majority of the articles I have found weigh the pros and cons of the issue and are fairly straight forward. These articles use facts and generally simplistic arguments to assert their claims. All of these articles are written for newspapers and are fairly easy to read so that the general public can make sense of them. These articles are fairly easy to summarize. That being said a minority of the articles use complex language and terms in them. These articles are for the most part written by industry insiders and there target audience is other people in the industry. When reading these articles I have consulted my dad to help me make better sense of them. He is in the oil business so he has been a great help making sense of these articles. The differing audience used by the writers of these articles has showed me how important it is to identify your audience before you begin writing. If you are writing a child’s book you cannot use complex wording and phrases that are way over a third graders head. While summarizing these articles has been fairly time consuming it has been very time saving in the long run. I have just finished writing out the rough draft of my research paper. As I planned out my essay I needed to use different references to strengthen my arguments. Having the summaries out in front of me allowed me to glance over them to decide which reference would be best in which part of my essay. It would have been much more difficult and ended up taking a lot more time if I had have just tried to remember the key points of each article in my head. The most useful article I found was the article “ Canada’s Tar Sands: Muck and Brass” from The Economist. It had a lot of strong arguments in favour of developing the oil sands and a lot of statistics that were very useful for my essay. It was one of the articles that was written for a wide audience and very easy to follow along with. In my Econ class we were required to subscribe to The Economist and we have to read a couple articles from it each week. It is a very well written magazine and I find it is usually written from an unbiased point of view. I searched for more articles from that magazine but could not find any more. It would have been nice to have another one to use but oh well. My mom is currently helping me proof read over the rough copy and I have an appointment with the writing center tomorrow. Hopefully there will not be to many problems with it and maybe I’ll be able to get it done this week!
Wednesday, April 20, 2011
Lesson 10 Prompt: Freewrite
I am starting to get more confident about writing my research paper. I like the classical argument format because it will include my own three arguments, a summary of my opponent’s arguments and a rebuttal. The latter two paragraphs will allow for more writing thus helping me to fulfill the seven to ten page requirements. In my research I have found a lot of pros to developing Alberta’s oil sands but not many cons. Most of the articles I have read explain why they should be developed followed by a brief summary of the environmental concerns and then reasoning why those environmental concerns should be discredited. One reason I believe that there are not many articles on the other side of the argument is because of the lack of resources the green movement against the oil sands has at this point. It is impossible to ignore the environmental impacts of the oil sands development but they seem to be an afterthought in the Canadian media. Big oil has a lot of money and weapons in their advertising campaign to get people on their side and the environmentalist are fighting an uphill battle. I would like to see a more balanced perspective on the issue but I do not know if that will ever be possible with all the money the oil companies have to throw around. Despite this fact my research has been very helpful in creating my arguments. The facts and numbers that the articles use will be very helpful to me in conveying my ideas. One area that I am struggling with though is who my audience should be. I am not sure if I should write to the people of Canada, or the people in power around the world who will be consuming the oil. The deadline is getting pretty close now, time to bear down.
Lesson 9 Prompt: Am I Threatened?
Why am I feeling threatened by this research paper (if you are)? or Why am I feeling confident about this research paper?
I am feeling a little bit threatened by this research paper. I know that I have written many papers before so I really shouldn’t be threatened but the fact that this paper is required to be seven to ten pages long is very unnerving. I have never written a paper that long before and I really hope I can come up with enough arguments to fill the space. I think that I have found enough sources to come up with arguments but you never know until you put pen to paper.
I am feeling a little bit threatened by this research paper. I know that I have written many papers before so I really shouldn’t be threatened but the fact that this paper is required to be seven to ten pages long is very unnerving. I have never written a paper that long before and I really hope I can come up with enough arguments to fill the space. I think that I have found enough sources to come up with arguments but you never know until you put pen to paper.
Lesson 9 Prompt: Outside Help
What do I need outside help with?
I will talk with my dad more about the issue to help get a better understanding of the complex issues involved. He has been in the oil business for over thirty years and he will know all of the pros and cons involved with the Athabasca oil sands development. We have talked about the issue before so I know is well learned on the subject and he should provide a balanced perspective on the issue.
I will talk with my dad more about the issue to help get a better understanding of the complex issues involved. He has been in the oil business for over thirty years and he will know all of the pros and cons involved with the Athabasca oil sands development. We have talked about the issue before so I know is well learned on the subject and he should provide a balanced perspective on the issue.
Lesson 9 Prompt: Whats left?
What else do I still need to do?
I still have a lot left to do before the end of the semester. I allowed myself to get a bit behind so I have been working hard to catch up but balancing English with three other courses has been tough. With the research paper upcoming very soon I need to lay down a plan of what my essay will look like. I think I think I have found three strong arguments for my point but I will need to figure out how to elaborate on those points. Finding more sources with facts should help me to do this.
I still have a lot left to do before the end of the semester. I allowed myself to get a bit behind so I have been working hard to catch up but balancing English with three other courses has been tough. With the research paper upcoming very soon I need to lay down a plan of what my essay will look like. I think I think I have found three strong arguments for my point but I will need to figure out how to elaborate on those points. Finding more sources with facts should help me to do this.
Tuesday, April 5, 2011
Lesson 8 Prompt: Thesis Statement Test
E-ex C2-1 Thesis statements
User: Sean Cahill
Instructor e-mail: Not Available
Start time: 2:21 PM
Question 1:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
A recent trend in law enforcement known as "community policing" shows much promise in deterring criminal activity.
Correct answer:
A recent trend in law enforcement known as "community policing" shows much promise in deterring criminal activity.
Score: 1
Question 2:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
Because air pollution is of serious concern to people in the world today, many countries have implemented a variety of plans to begin solving the problem.
Correct answer:
So far, research suggests that zero-emissions vehicles are not a sensible solution to the problem of steadily rising air pollution.
Score: 0
Question 3:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
The Sex Pistols could not have succeeded without singer and lyricist Johnny Rotten, who provided the stage presence, poetry, and authentic working-class rage that galvanized the group’s young English audiences.
Correct answer:
The Sex Pistols could not have succeeded without singer and lyricist Johnny Rotten, who provided the stage presence, poetry, and authentic working-class rage that galvanized the group’s young English audiences.
Score: 1
Question 4:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
Because it has become outdated, the electoral college should be replaced by a system that allows the US president to be elected by direct popular vote.
Correct answer:
Because it has become outdated, the electoral college should be replaced by a system that allows the US president to be elected by direct popular vote.
Score: 1
Question 5:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
Though employers currently have a legal right to monitor workers’ e-mail and voice mail messages, this practice can have serious effects on employee morale.
Correct answer:
Though employers currently have a legal right to monitor workers’ e-mail and voice mail messages, this practice can have serious effects on employee morale.
Score: 1
Question 6:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
In his autobiographical Narrative, Frederick Douglass draws on techniques used in popular texts of his day—sentimental literature, the Bible, and rip-roaring oratory—to persuade his audience to reject slavery.
Correct answer:
In his autobiographical Narrative, Frederick Douglass draws on techniques used in popular texts of his day—sentimental literature, the Bible, and rip-roaring oratory—to persuade his audience to reject slavery.
Score: 1
Question 7:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
Although they are widely ignored and derided as mindlessly violent, video games are a form of popular art that deserves to be evaluated as seriously as television and film.
Correct answer:
Although they are widely ignored and derided as mindlessly violent, video games are a form of popular art that deserves to be evaluated as seriously as television and film.
Score: 1
Question 8:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
Judges should have discretion in sentencing drug offenders so that those convicted of nonviolent or first-time offenses do not automatically go to prison.
Correct answer:
Judges should have discretion in sentencing drug offenders so that those convicted of nonviolent or first-time offenses do not automatically go to prison.
Score: 1
Question 9:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
Instead of repealing the estate tax altogether, Congress should raise the current exemption significantly, to two million dollars, so that wealthy estates are taxed but those of the vast majority of Americans are not.
Correct answer:
Instead of repealing the estate tax altogether, Congress should raise the current exemption significantly, to two million dollars, so that wealthy estates are taxed but those of the vast majority of Americans are not.
Score: 1
Question 10:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
The social service system in Metropolis has broken down because today’s workers are underpaid, poorly trained, and overworked.
Correct answer:
The social service system in Metropolis has broken down because today’s workers are underpaid, poorly trained, and overworked.
Score: 1
Number of questions attempted: 10
Number of questions correct: 9
Percentage score: 90%
User: Sean Cahill
Instructor e-mail: Not Available
Start time: 2:21 PM
Question 1:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
A recent trend in law enforcement known as "community policing" shows much promise in deterring criminal activity.
Correct answer:
A recent trend in law enforcement known as "community policing" shows much promise in deterring criminal activity.
Score: 1
Question 2:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
Because air pollution is of serious concern to people in the world today, many countries have implemented a variety of plans to begin solving the problem.
Correct answer:
So far, research suggests that zero-emissions vehicles are not a sensible solution to the problem of steadily rising air pollution.
Score: 0
Question 3:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
The Sex Pistols could not have succeeded without singer and lyricist Johnny Rotten, who provided the stage presence, poetry, and authentic working-class rage that galvanized the group’s young English audiences.
Correct answer:
The Sex Pistols could not have succeeded without singer and lyricist Johnny Rotten, who provided the stage presence, poetry, and authentic working-class rage that galvanized the group’s young English audiences.
Score: 1
Question 4:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
Because it has become outdated, the electoral college should be replaced by a system that allows the US president to be elected by direct popular vote.
Correct answer:
Because it has become outdated, the electoral college should be replaced by a system that allows the US president to be elected by direct popular vote.
Score: 1
Question 5:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
Though employers currently have a legal right to monitor workers’ e-mail and voice mail messages, this practice can have serious effects on employee morale.
Correct answer:
Though employers currently have a legal right to monitor workers’ e-mail and voice mail messages, this practice can have serious effects on employee morale.
Score: 1
Question 6:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
In his autobiographical Narrative, Frederick Douglass draws on techniques used in popular texts of his day—sentimental literature, the Bible, and rip-roaring oratory—to persuade his audience to reject slavery.
Correct answer:
In his autobiographical Narrative, Frederick Douglass draws on techniques used in popular texts of his day—sentimental literature, the Bible, and rip-roaring oratory—to persuade his audience to reject slavery.
Score: 1
Question 7:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
Although they are widely ignored and derided as mindlessly violent, video games are a form of popular art that deserves to be evaluated as seriously as television and film.
Correct answer:
Although they are widely ignored and derided as mindlessly violent, video games are a form of popular art that deserves to be evaluated as seriously as television and film.
Score: 1
Question 8:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
Judges should have discretion in sentencing drug offenders so that those convicted of nonviolent or first-time offenses do not automatically go to prison.
Correct answer:
Judges should have discretion in sentencing drug offenders so that those convicted of nonviolent or first-time offenses do not automatically go to prison.
Score: 1
Question 9:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
Instead of repealing the estate tax altogether, Congress should raise the current exemption significantly, to two million dollars, so that wealthy estates are taxed but those of the vast majority of Americans are not.
Correct answer:
Instead of repealing the estate tax altogether, Congress should raise the current exemption significantly, to two million dollars, so that wealthy estates are taxed but those of the vast majority of Americans are not.
Score: 1
Question 10:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.
Your answer:
The social service system in Metropolis has broken down because today’s workers are underpaid, poorly trained, and overworked.
Correct answer:
The social service system in Metropolis has broken down because today’s workers are underpaid, poorly trained, and overworked.
Score: 1
Number of questions attempted: 10
Number of questions correct: 9
Percentage score: 90%
Lesson 8 Prompt: Research Topic Visual
I am planning on using the topic of the development of Alberta’s oil sands for my research paper. The article Canada’s Tar Sands: Muck and Brass, which has no author listed, from the magazine The Economist, contains an image of an oil sands worker holding a muddy handful of tar sand with the words filthy rich below it. The workers hand is stained with oil, showing the dirtiness associated with the oil sands industry. The image does not sway my opinion of the topic but raises an interesting problem, the environmental impact associated with the development of oil sands production. It shows that while there is a great economic benefit from the oil sands it comes at an environmental cost. This image has prompted me look at wither the economic benefits of oil sands development outweigh the environmental costs in my essay. I have attached the image below.
Lesson 8 Prompt: "Two Ways a Woman Can Get Hurt"
I chose to use the image on page 423 from Jean Kilbourne’s essay “Two Ways a Woman Can Get Hurt.” It is part of the anthology, Rereading America: Cultural Contexts for Critical Thinking and Writing. All of the images from her essay effectively drive home the point that sexuality is widely used by advertisers to sell their product and quite often give the impression of male dominance over women and makes light of important social issues such as violence against women and racism. I chose to use this image because for me it is the most offensive of all the images and one of the most unacceptable. The ad is for F. Scott’s night club and shows a cocktail with the words “if your date won’t listen to reason try a velvet hammer.” This advertisement makes light of the social problem of using inhibitors as a means to sexual encounters.
The image is offensive to me for many reasons. It makes a joke of the use of alcohol and inhibitors as a means to sex. It promotes men to think that the use of alcohol is an acceptable means to get what you are looking for. I have a younger sister who is just of legal age to drink and things like this are very worrisome for me. I have a few different female friends who have been slipped the date rape drug and advertisements such as this one make it seem like it is acceptable to use inhibitors to get what you want. While I agree with the right to freedom of speech, advertisements such as this that promote violence and taking advantage of people should not be acceptable. It is up to as consumers to stand up against unacceptable use of advertisement to promote dangerous social actions.
The image is offensive to me for many reasons. It makes a joke of the use of alcohol and inhibitors as a means to sex. It promotes men to think that the use of alcohol is an acceptable means to get what you are looking for. I have a younger sister who is just of legal age to drink and things like this are very worrisome for me. I have a few different female friends who have been slipped the date rape drug and advertisements such as this one make it seem like it is acceptable to use inhibitors to get what you want. While I agree with the right to freedom of speech, advertisements such as this that promote violence and taking advantage of people should not be acceptable. It is up to as consumers to stand up against unacceptable use of advertisement to promote dangerous social actions.
Sunday, April 3, 2011
Lesson 7 Prompt: Participation
Read another student's blog. Indicate whose blog you read. Did you make any comments on that blog? Why or why not? Ask about extra credit points for making a comment on someone else's blog.
I chose to read Alecia’s Journal. I made a comment on hers because I really enjoy reading her blog. It is well thought out and well written. What’s up with the extra credit for making a comment on someone else’s blog?
I chose to read Alecia’s Journal. I made a comment on hers because I really enjoy reading her blog. It is well thought out and well written. What’s up with the extra credit for making a comment on someone else’s blog?
Lesson 7 Prompt: Value of Source
What value does each of your sources have to your audience?
Three of my sources used for assignment seven were city newspaper articles. Local newspapers are of great value to Calgary aldermen and to Calgary’s mayor. The local press reach huge numbers of Calgarians and have the ability to sway people’s opinions. Those people of Calgary who are swayed by the press are the same people who vote in local elections and are the ones who gave council members their jobs. The media is very powerful in politics and good politicians know how to use the media to their advantage. My last two sources were web facts on the current housing market in Calgary. This information is very valuable to local politicians who must use this information to make the best choices for Calgarians.
Three of my sources used for assignment seven were city newspaper articles. Local newspapers are of great value to Calgary aldermen and to Calgary’s mayor. The local press reach huge numbers of Calgarians and have the ability to sway people’s opinions. Those people of Calgary who are swayed by the press are the same people who vote in local elections and are the ones who gave council members their jobs. The media is very powerful in politics and good politicians know how to use the media to their advantage. My last two sources were web facts on the current housing market in Calgary. This information is very valuable to local politicians who must use this information to make the best choices for Calgarians.
Lesson 7 Prompt: Can You Sway the Audience
Can the audience be swayed by your claim and reasons? Why or why not? Tell why each reason is stong enough to sway a person to your way of thinking.
I think that city council could be swayed by my claim and reason. Each of my supporting claims provides a strong, clear reason as to why they should vote in favor of allowing secondary suits. The first argument was that secondary suits would create affordable housing. Calgary has some of the highest housing prices in North America and many regular citizens cannot afford adequate housing. This reason should help sway council because if they vote in favor of it they will be helping the people of Calgary who’s wages have not kept up with the increased prices in the hot Calgary real estate market. The second argument that secondary suits will help create a safer regulated market for them should help convince city council that secondary suits are for the best. Under the current system renters of secondary suits are not protected by the law and often find themselves living in sub-standard, unsafe homes. With the power that Calgarians gave their alderman it is their responsibility to protect those who gave them that power. My last argument was that secondary suits will help slow urban sprawl in Calgary. Urban sprawl costs the city a great deal of money and with the money saved council could help alleviate some of the budget pressures facing them. This would help make councils job a lot easier and should help sway them in favor of secondary suits.
I think that city council could be swayed by my claim and reason. Each of my supporting claims provides a strong, clear reason as to why they should vote in favor of allowing secondary suits. The first argument was that secondary suits would create affordable housing. Calgary has some of the highest housing prices in North America and many regular citizens cannot afford adequate housing. This reason should help sway council because if they vote in favor of it they will be helping the people of Calgary who’s wages have not kept up with the increased prices in the hot Calgary real estate market. The second argument that secondary suits will help create a safer regulated market for them should help convince city council that secondary suits are for the best. Under the current system renters of secondary suits are not protected by the law and often find themselves living in sub-standard, unsafe homes. With the power that Calgarians gave their alderman it is their responsibility to protect those who gave them that power. My last argument was that secondary suits will help slow urban sprawl in Calgary. Urban sprawl costs the city a great deal of money and with the money saved council could help alleviate some of the budget pressures facing them. This would help make councils job a lot easier and should help sway them in favor of secondary suits.
Lesson 7 Prompt: Audience for Essay
Who is the audience for your essay? What is the thesis of essay? Does it include the claim and 3 supporting reasons to make it a stong thesis?
For my essay I wrote on the current secondary suits battle that is being fought in Calgary’s city hall. My audience was city alderman and Mayor Naheed Nenshi who have the will make the final decision on wither or not to allow secondary suits. My thesis was, “City council would be making a mistake by voting down any legislation that allows secondary suits, as these suits should be permitted across the city of Calgary because it will create affordable housing, allow for a regulated market, and slow urban sprawl that has exploded over the last decade.” The claim that secondary suits should be permitted is supported by three strong arguments: that it will create affordable housing, allow for a regulated market and slow urban sprawl. I believe that my thesis is a strong one and it includes three strong supporting arguments.
For my essay I wrote on the current secondary suits battle that is being fought in Calgary’s city hall. My audience was city alderman and Mayor Naheed Nenshi who have the will make the final decision on wither or not to allow secondary suits. My thesis was, “City council would be making a mistake by voting down any legislation that allows secondary suits, as these suits should be permitted across the city of Calgary because it will create affordable housing, allow for a regulated market, and slow urban sprawl that has exploded over the last decade.” The claim that secondary suits should be permitted is supported by three strong arguments: that it will create affordable housing, allow for a regulated market and slow urban sprawl. I believe that my thesis is a strong one and it includes three strong supporting arguments.
Lesson 6 Prompt: Political Cartoon Analysis
The political cartoon I chose to write on is shown at the bottom of this entry. It is a political commentary on the current Canadian Prime Minister’s environmental policy. It shows Mr. Harper standing on a sinking iceberg, while two polar bears sit watching with one saying “Harper’s latest environmental platform”. With all the controversy over global warming and its effects on the environment the cartoon uses the setting effectively. Harper has been criticized in the media for not taking a strong enough stance against global warming. He is standing on a sinking iceberg representing the melting of the polar ice caps, which is caused by global warming. If the warming continues it is presumed he will drown which signifies the need for a change to his policies to survive this election. Climate change is an important topic in the upcoming federal election and this cartoon really makes the viewer think. My thesis statement for this cartoon is- Mr. Harper’s environmental platform is not strong enough. If he fails strengthen his environmental platform his political career will not survive this election.
Lesson 6 Prompt: Responce to Cartoon
Thesis statement: Internet chat rooms can be a dangerous place, especially for young people. You do not know who is on there or who you are talking to. Sven Van Assche’s cartoon depicts a young girl standing in front of an open door with the words “internet chat rooms” written on it. The open door is pitch black other than the seventeen set’s of eyes, that are eying up the little door. The people behind the door are saying “Knock! Knock!,” as the little girl replies “who’s there?” Assche is making a point that because you do not know who you are talking to over the internet it is a dangerous place, especially for young people. The scary looking eyes that are behind the door way are scary looking and imply danger. The girl in front of the door is very small and holding a doll, which highlights her vulnerability. This is a dangerous situation and is what leads me to the conclusion that internet chat rooms are no place for small children.
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